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          She had only opened her eyes for a few seconds, and she had already seen her whole life flash before her eyes. No, she wasn’t dying, but it was as if she were, she thought, seeing what destiny lied before her. A life of pain, grieve, tears, lies, hope and love, lust and sin, a life of ups and downs, a life of goods and bads, a life of fulfillment and of despair. She had barely put one little toe in this new world, and she had already felt the putrid smell of death in the wards surrounding her, the mingled odor of sweat, emptiness and hatred. The sound of people dying, suffering or coldly laughing in their insanity had hit her little ears the very second she had come out. The chill of darkness and misfortune had already caressed her delicate skin, leaving long slimy tracks.
           She had no idea what to make of it all, but she knew that for those few seconds when her spirit had just passed the boundary between the two worlds she was able to see everything “life” had in store for her, able to know the secrets of the world, able to care and to feel.
         “All this will be over soon” she quickly thought, knowing that the law says you are to forget before you can begin again.
          And then she heard a strange voice saying “Congratulations, Corinne, you have a beautiful baby girl!” and knew it was time to let go... she didn’t want to let go of all she had been, of all she was, of all she would become, of all she could become. She wanted to fight the stupid law. But she couldn’t.
           She let out a scream and started crying... And then she forgot.
suppose this is true, suppose each of us sees their destiny when they are born, and forget it the next minute, and that each of us can see, for once in our lifes, all the hidden shadows of the world.... suppose that means that for just a few seconds, when we are born, we are a part of the universe before we become a part of the world
suppose we were all parts of a star, feathers of angels, or drops of rain...
suppose it's true
i was just thinking about this...
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ailu Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2004
whoa. this is beautiful! it works up and has a sudden, unexpected ending. You could write a book out of this!!

:D
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maitreyi Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2004
he, i thought about writing a book loads of times... maybe it's time i did that. and since i won't be able to publish it, i'll just have to email it to you and you'll just have to read it and give me your opinion on it. but he, it would be a short book, i don't think i'll be able to write more than 30 pages...
he, maybe i will do that!
that's so exciting :d
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ailu Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2004
you really shoudl do it! and maybe you could get it published too !!
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maitreyi Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2004
i'll try to. i'll have to think of the whole story, of a way to write it so that everything makes sense, of a genre, like essay, or fiction, or... hmmmm... i'll let you know how it goes!
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ailu Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2004
yay :D
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ForgottenProphecy Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2004
BABIES!
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maitreyi Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2004
yup:) the most beautiful creatures!
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ForgottenProphecy Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2004
They kinda look like aliens, all slimy and beady eyes screaming with no teeth. But yeah. LOL
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maitreyi Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2004
aliens, huh?:D well, i kinda like the little fellas :)
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ForgottenProphecy Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2004
They are cute. (until they learn how to talk) =)
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